I have been wanting to post a piece where your opinion counts! I have a short poem that I
a) need help naming
b) need help deciding which sounds better.
So you can message me your reply or feel free to comment below!! Title options and then chose #1 or #2!!
#1Darkened shards gouge the open fields, no one cares. No one sees the Lavender sky. No one has a friendly smile No one looks you in the eye. Creaking and rubbing metal is everywhere. I’m drowning in stranger’s voices So lonely is the City Life So lonely are the stranger noises. City life inside a bubble, shadows cast by buildings bodies. Unseen tops are the new greenery while buses and taxis-not people-make frequent stops. >> or << #2 So lonely is the city life drowning in strangers voices and strange noises. Creaking and rubbing metal everywhere. No one has a friendly smile. No one looks you in the eye. No one points out the lavender sky and no one cares that fields are gouged by darkened shards.